Last week, our humanity class and ESL class went to the Islamic art museum. At there i could see some amazing things like, Islamic architecture, Holy book, Jewel and other stuffs. However, my most favorite was, Steve Mccurry's photograph room.
When I Looked around that room, it was really great and awful. This is because, I could see perfect and attractive photos, and I chose one called, "Afghanistan Girl" . When I saw that picture, I felt strange and dangerous, also I felt her feelings like sadness and loneliness. This is because, on her eye present and explain some harmless. Therefore I choose that picture, I can find many meanings and feelings.
I like your description of Afghanistan girl. You have described your feeling very clearly. But i would like to see more description and i can see your grammar mistakes. I think the paragraph is too short. You did very good job!!!!
ReplyDeleteHello, I'm Yoodam. I just read over your post. It was good, but I think you should describe more about that girl. It's a bit short. Mostly, you wrote about your trip. The thing I want to say is write more about it. HAHA!! -YooDam :-)
ReplyDeleteI could understand what you want to show with your sentences because your grammar and vocabulary were really fantastic. None of your word should be fixed because it's perfect. However,it would be better if you describe your feeling with more details. Fortunately, that is the only thing what you should add to your work!!! (Nice Job, dude~)
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